There is more to telling a story than what actually happened. Think of the teachers whose classes put you to sleep. Then think of your favorite teachers. You loved their classes because they loved what they were doing. They surprised and delighted you. You can write like they taught--it just takes a little thought.
Suppose your first draft reads--
I woke up on the ground and saw the buck. I sat up and hurt my neck and I remembered what happened. I sat up too fast and my neck hurt. It was cold, too. And then I remembered the buck and saw him on the ground ten feet away.
All the facts seem to be there. So do a couple of cut and paste errors I left in to show you how easy it is to miss them, especially in a long article. The easiest way to catch these, and other problems, is to read your article out loud. You will be amazed at what you "hear" that you didn't see. You will catch logic disconnects, misspellings, missing words (even sentences), repetition, grammar errors, and more, all in an article you thought was ready to rock! After you clean up what you find, read it out loud again.
I woke up on the ground and it was cold. I sat up fast and hurt my neck. I remembered what happened and looked around. The buck was dead on the ground ten feet away.
Now ask yourself if you are fascinated by what you have written? If not, no one else will be, either. Read it one last time, and keep in mind the words of Paul McCartney in “Michelle”: "...these are words that go together well..."
When I woke on the ground, I was cold; very cold. I remembered what had happened and jerked upward.
I paid in pain for my quick move, but had to know...and there it was. Unmoving, obviously dead,
he lay, ten feet away, antler tips sparkling in the soft morning light.
Dazzle us, baby!